I've been meaning to finish this for months
now. The first page of my new web comic series: D42!
This first page was really a sort of "testing the water" thing for me. I didn't know where I needed work more, so I wanted to just go and see what people initially thought. The joke here was meant to be somewhat Monty Python-esque in that the two NPCs are talking about seriously complex topics that seem out of place for their station in society, while diverting the focus of the comic from the actual plot (see giant arrow in my head for details). Speaking of which, the kanji present is supposed to stand for Weight, or Story in Japanese...according to Google Translate.
So, what do you think? What needs work?
P.S: There was actually more dialogue for this piece, but I couldn't fit it on due to issues of being a n00b to this whole thing, here's what me and my friend Alleluia came up with during development:
MP: "Wait, run that by me one more time: How exactly does being remembered make your immortal, if you're already dead?"
AL: "Are you really dead if people still know who you are? I don't think so. Even a thousand years pass and people still remember your name and say how great a guy you were...Now that sounds like immortality to me."
MP: "But that's a complete misconception on the theory of eternal life. You have to be dead to live forever? That's rediculously confusing to the point of being a total paradox."
AL: "Your immortal in the sense that your name never dies...They'll all know your name and they'll all know that you belong to it. And besides you can't be a "real" immortal anyway. Everything dies."
MP: "Then immortality is not a permenant state of being, because eventually the society that remembers the indevidual in question will die too, their existance forgotten. In my opinion, their should be levels of immortality rated by the added length of life, and difficulty of being destroyed, rather than people just believing immortality is a generic lable for anyone who just can't die."
AL: "We've been over this before and if I've told you once I've told you a thousand times that Immortality by definition means one who by no circumstance can die. But if we use it as a term for one who may be on this earth forever then you must also accept that one who is cannot be forgotten is an immortal because he exists in some form."